What do you think of this....?

I thought the dialogue wasn't as good as it should have been. You should do some observing of your everyday conversations and see that real life convos sound nothing like this. It's not realistic enough and it's a little cliche a bit, but not a lot from what I read. You should add a little more character to the people around the protagonist. People don't speak grammatically correct (most people don't). You should make it sound more natural, and people just don't say HI Are you going out this weakend? It's a little rushed, you need to slow down, but not to much or it may get boring. Add a little suspense or mystery. Don't just tell everything, leave your reader something to ponder about.